ACADEMIC VOICE AND MLA CITATION: COLLABORATIVE ACTIVITY
Incorporating borrowed material into your own writing is not simply a matter of avoiding plagiarism. You must also create smooth transitions between your own words and ideas and those borrowed from other sources. These transitions should introduce and identify your sources and should evaluate the borrowed material. Frequently, inexperienced writers will simply drop a summary or a quotation into the middle of their own writing and rely on only a parenthetical citation to help the reader make sense of it.
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DIRECTIONS: The following excerpted paragraph of a student draft titled, “Make Way for the Bad Guy,” contains a number of errors in regard to the use of signal phrases, qualifiers, MLA citations, grammar, and mechanics.
For each of the 10 numbered sentences, identify any errors related to these items and explain how they should be corrected.
Assume this paragraph appeared in the middle of the writer's research paper.
You should elect a note taker and a speaker for your group. The note taker is responsible for recording the group's information, and the speaker will report this information back to the class.
(1)Some argue that music and youth respond to crime movies in an alarming way to society. (2) In “A Foul Mouth with a Following,” Bernard Weinraub writes that Scarface attracted the younger audience, especially rap stars and college students and was rated X for extreme violence and language (Wenraub). (3) Weinraub explains that Americans are interested in gangster films like Scarface and adds that major rappers like Snoop Dog and Eve talk about how the movie shows similarity with their lives (Weinbraub). (4) Weinraub shows that the director of Scarface, Brian Depalma, stated, “he believed that the movie stirred younger audiences, especially those in the hip-hop world, because many of them had grown up in poor neighborhoods and had become almost rich overnight. (Weinraub)” (5)The new era of gangsta rap was born a few years after Scarface came out in theatres, (6) Gangsta rap contained violent and explicit lyrics, and critics disagreed with the negative comments and abuse toward women along with its negative image toward authorities. (7) Critics believe gangsta rap spawned a new generation of music that causes controversy today. (8) Weinraub reports that Scarface was so influencing that many hip hop artists have used phrases within the movie in their music and one in particular named himself Scarface (Weinraub). (9) Mr. Bregman, the producer of Scarface, stated that “it’s not just the hip-hop community—white college students have ‘Scarface parties’”(Weinraub). (10) Many college students agree to have some sort of Scarface memorabilia, and they enjoy the power and respect a mobster like Tony Montana in Scarface possessed.
Work Cited:
Weinraub, Bernard. “A Foul Mouth With a Following.” New York Times 23 Sep. 2003.
